What am I doing wrong?

Been trying out the Loomis method for drawing faces and whenever I try an angle besides straight on it comes out looking wonky. Included are a digital sketch I did in just the lineart and the other with the guidelines overlaid in 50% opacity.

I would love some actual advice. Tried posting this in a different subreddit and only got the frustrating non-advice of "study anatomy". So some practical tips for a beginner artist like myself would be greatly appreciated!